The Sunday Scribblings prompt: Compose.COMPOSERS
(Haiku Sequence)
Drawn on grey dawn sky
bird-notes on a staff of wires
write their own music.
Snail who has feasted,
in silver calligraphy
leaves his thank-you note.
Butterflies flutter
brightly multi-colored wings,
inventing flowers.
write their own music.
Snail who has feasted,
in silver calligraphy
leaves his thank-you note.
Butterflies flutter
brightly multi-colored wings,
inventing flowers.
46 comments:
These are just lovely, Granny Smith! I especially love the image of the snail leaving its "silver calligraphy"--wonderful!
I've never heard of a more romantized version of a snail! :D These are great - creatures that compose is a great take on the prompt! :)
I had never thought of it in that way but your words are so true.. As the birds sit across the telephone wires they do look like little music notes. I just loved all of these creative haikus gran! Beautiful!
What beautiful images your words conjure up in my mind.
I love it! Who would have ever thought of a snails trail as poetry...a thank you! Thank YOU for your words!
ah yes, the bird notes were my favorite too. Can you imagine playing the song they sing...now which one is the whole note--the one all balled up with his head under his wing, perhaps. You write great poems.
I love all three haikus! The bird imagery is my favourite, but I'm amazed that I liked the snail one - I usually hate snails and their yucky trails :) Beuatiful haikus.
Wonderful transformations, invented flowers and thank-you notes (snail's my favorite). Sweet internal rhymes careening as well. Peace, Granny Smith.
Nature and words in perfect symbolic harmony :-)
Yes they do, invent flowers. How lovely.
I love Haiku - your images are lovely.
That's clever and lovely!
Among the most original haiku I've read in a long time. The first two are my favorites.
Beautiful! "Silver calligraphy"! What a perfect image! Granny, you are really an inspiration. Thanks.
Oh, you used wonderful words in fresh and creative ways!
What truly lovely words. I love the snail piece. Fantastic.
had to laugh at that second one,, as i kept finding such calligraphy on a burgundy bed sheet.... only to find out my dog had brought in the most enormous snail/slug i have ever seen,, and deposited it , alive, in my bed!!!!!!!
this was a pleasure.....
Thank you for visiting today. I love your haikus and will most especially never look a birds on powerlines again in quite the same way.
sweet images Granny Smith!
My scribbling is a haiku too, but not as wonderful as yours!
Each haiku has a fascinating twist. But I love the concept of butterflies inventing flowers.
Utterly beautiful!
Gemma
Oh I'm right in there with the butterflies!!!
What a lovely mix of discipline and creativity! I love how your title ties all three of these haikus together.
These are great! Seriously, good writing.
Very beautiful Granny, details, and metaphors used wisely.
I agree with all that's been said, just lovely.
These haiku and your gorgeous photo, lifted me from the dissonance of the week, composed me into a better self. Music!
I must admit I'm not knowledgeable when it comes to poetry, but I loved the simplicity of this.
Beautiful haiku and "silver calligraphy" was brilliant!
ah, the snail, that is what he was doing on my cabbages! really lovely haiku.
vibrant images!
I envy your skill and love these haiku!
At first I was going to tell you how I loved the first line, but then I realized I loved every line. Plus I feel you did wonders with the subject. I find myself enjoying the way you are perceiving the world.
Sorry. I've already read these and commented, but I had to come read them again. They are just that good.
I read this and the post about snakes. You let life leak from your pen in a beautiful way.
Thank you for your comment. From you, it was a great compliment.
b
These are just beautiful! Thanks for sharing your talent with us.
What gorgeous haikus!
Very creative and imaginative haikus. Well done!
Linda
Nickers and Ink
ON GUARD, at Nickers and Ink
I love this collection. I now will look at a snail in a different way!
Just lovely! You certainly have a loyal following over here Granny Smith. Easy to understand why.
Huggs, G
www.mypoeticpath.wordpress.com
Your colorful words never cease to amaze me, Phyllis. Thanks for sharing such a nice composition.
xxxxx
I like your header! Lovely! Reminds me that Spring is on its way.
It was a lovely poem. Very cute. you seem to be a true worshiper of nature....
Hello.
Nonizamboni directed me here, and I'm very glad she did.
Your Haiku are beautiful.
I think I may have read your first story in an old anthology some time ago.
You are an inspiration!
Well Hello to Granny Smith!
I absolutely adore Granny Smith Apples, so I am going to add you to my favourites! Love it!
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