Friday, April 18, 2008

Creative Creatures

The Sunday Scribblings prompt: Compose.

COMPOSERS
(Haiku Sequence)

Drawn on grey dawn sky
bird-notes on a staff of wires
write their own music.


Snail who has feasted,
in silver calligraphy
leaves his thank-you note.



Butterflies flutter
brightly multi-colored wings,
inventing flowers.

46 comments:

Karen said...

These are just lovely, Granny Smith! I especially love the image of the snail leaving its "silver calligraphy"--wonderful!

texasblu said...

I've never heard of a more romantized version of a snail! :D These are great - creatures that compose is a great take on the prompt! :)

Lucy said...

I had never thought of it in that way but your words are so true.. As the birds sit across the telephone wires they do look like little music notes. I just loved all of these creative haikus gran! Beautiful!

Smoochdog ~ said...

What beautiful images your words conjure up in my mind.

Jo Anne O. said...

I love it! Who would have ever thought of a snails trail as poetry...a thank you! Thank YOU for your words!

Lilibeth said...

ah yes, the bird notes were my favorite too. Can you imagine playing the song they sing...now which one is the whole note--the one all balled up with his head under his wing, perhaps. You write great poems.

Shyam said...

I love all three haikus! The bird imagery is my favourite, but I'm amazed that I liked the snail one - I usually hate snails and their yucky trails :) Beuatiful haikus.

murat11 said...

Wonderful transformations, invented flowers and thank-you notes (snail's my favorite). Sweet internal rhymes careening as well. Peace, Granny Smith.

anthonynorth said...

Nature and words in perfect symbolic harmony :-)

SusieJ said...

Yes they do, invent flowers. How lovely.

Deirdre said...

I love Haiku - your images are lovely.

Maggie May said...

That's clever and lovely!

Leonard Blumfeld said...

Among the most original haiku I've read in a long time. The first two are my favorites.

GreenishLady said...

Beautiful! "Silver calligraphy"! What a perfect image! Granny, you are really an inspiration. Thanks.

Linda Jacobs said...

Oh, you used wonderful words in fresh and creative ways!

keith hillman said...

What truly lovely words. I love the snail piece. Fantastic.

paisley said...

had to laugh at that second one,, as i kept finding such calligraphy on a burgundy bed sheet.... only to find out my dog had brought in the most enormous snail/slug i have ever seen,, and deposited it , alive, in my bed!!!!!!!

this was a pleasure.....

AnnieElf said...

Thank you for visiting today. I love your haikus and will most especially never look a birds on powerlines again in quite the same way.

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arboleda said...

sweet images Granny Smith!

June said...

My scribbling is a haiku too, but not as wonderful as yours!

Greyscale Territory said...

Each haiku has a fascinating twist. But I love the concept of butterflies inventing flowers.

Utterly beautiful!

Gemma

Sherry/Cherie said...

Oh I'm right in there with the butterflies!!!

Beth said...

What a lovely mix of discipline and creativity! I love how your title ties all three of these haikus together.

A.Decker said...

These are great! Seriously, good writing.

Beatriz' suitcase contents said...

Very beautiful Granny, details, and metaphors used wisely.

January said...

I agree with all that's been said, just lovely.

anno said...

These haiku and your gorgeous photo, lifted me from the dissonance of the week, composed me into a better self. Music!

Jon said...

I must admit I'm not knowledgeable when it comes to poetry, but I loved the simplicity of this.

Tammy said...

Beautiful haiku and "silver calligraphy" was brilliant!

ian russell said...

ah, the snail, that is what he was doing on my cabbages! really lovely haiku.

Jennifer Hicks said...

vibrant images!

tumblewords said...

I envy your skill and love these haiku!

Tammie Lee said...

At first I was going to tell you how I loved the first line, but then I realized I loved every line. Plus I feel you did wonders with the subject. I find myself enjoying the way you are perceiving the world.

Lilibeth said...

Sorry. I've already read these and commented, but I had to come read them again. They are just that good.

b said...

I read this and the post about snakes. You let life leak from your pen in a beautiful way.

Thank you for your comment. From you, it was a great compliment.

b

forgetfulone said...

These are just beautiful! Thanks for sharing your talent with us.

Bethany said...

What gorgeous haikus!

LN- Nickers and Ink said...

Very creative and imaginative haikus. Well done!

Linda
Nickers and Ink


ON GUARD, at Nickers and Ink

Inland Empire Girl said...

I love this collection. I now will look at a snail in a different way!

Geraldine said...

Just lovely! You certainly have a loyal following over here Granny Smith. Easy to understand why.

Huggs, G

www.mypoeticpath.wordpress.com

nonizamboni said...

Your colorful words never cease to amaze me, Phyllis. Thanks for sharing such a nice composition.

xxxxx

Maggie May said...

I like your header! Lovely! Reminds me that Spring is on its way.

Medhini said...

It was a lovely poem. Very cute. you seem to be a true worshiper of nature....

Dragonstar said...

Hello.
Nonizamboni directed me here, and I'm very glad she did.
Your Haiku are beautiful.
I think I may have read your first story in an old anthology some time ago.
You are an inspiration!

mrsnesbitt said...

Well Hello to Granny Smith!
I absolutely adore Granny Smith Apples, so I am going to add you to my favourites! Love it!